TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

People in the world work to be happy. If I have the opportunity to get a secure job, I probably take the chance right away than wait for better jobs. These are the following reasons: I think that having the stable life is better way to be happy, we cannot have the chance to get a safe job easily. In addition, I believe that I can enjoy the things that I wanted later.

To begin with, living with assurance about future can make people feel happy. The reason why people work is to have stable life in the future and the secure job can provide the function of their work:this is to support worker. Stable job involves with predictable salary and it allows the people to have hope in the future. Moreover, if we cannot have conviction about working continuously or if we cannot get ready for expenditure such as accidents which can occur abrupt then our mind will not be settled and at peace. Thus, this makes us feel unsecured.

Secondly, when we get a secure job, we usually say grab the opportunity. Because we cannot have the chances whenever we want. Thus, when we have an occasion, we need to be ready to have that even to pay an opportunity cost. Furthermore, if we have financial safety, we would be more satisfied.

As an opportunity cost, we might need to give up lots of things that we want at that time. But, I believe that if we have calm situation now, we are able to have plan for doing the favorite things in the future. As much as the students study for the future, I think, choosing the stable job is necessary for the future.

Finally, although I need to abandon my current satisfaction, I want to have secure a job. To organize, I believe that choosing the rare chance will be better way to be happy in the future.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...calm situation now, we are able to have plan for doing the favorite things in the fu...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...table job is necessary for the future. Finally, although I need to abandon my c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, i think, in addition, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42857142857 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42353849351 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484472049689 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2511696767 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2222222222 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248062976345 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935791006132 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744138663652 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154242849762 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673822003582 0.0645574589148 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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