By and large, job is one the most crucial aspects of one's life; as people spend almost 1/3 of their lifetime in the workplace. Indeed, choosing a right job is the most serious decision, everyone could make. There is a moot point in this case as to how should people respond to the job opportunities, they encounter. An outstanding argument states that having the opportunity to get a secure job, people should take it right away rather than wait for a job that might be more satisfying. I strongly concur with it. In the ensuing lines, I will delve into 2 reasons to amply substantiate my thesis.
The first reason which deserves some words is that by having a secure job, one can better plan their life. When a person knows that s/he has a reliable income, s/he can have a better budgeting, make better decisions and better plan for their future plans. Comparably, if s/he waits to find a proper job, even if s/he gets to it, this job may not have enough security. In this case, although the job is satisfying, because of not having the essential security, everyone needs in their work, the person would not have the required peace of mind. Consequently, the satisfaction would be reduced after a short time. But consider a person having a regular income, s/he can buy a house, purchase a car, get married, pay for their hobbies, travel to wherever s/he would like and by this way, s/he can bring the needed satisfaction to their life. As a result, having a secure job as soon as possible is better than waiting for a satisfying job.
The second reason occurring to my mind is that having a secure job, one can get to life satisfaction by other ways and in other aspects of their life. The pleasure of job is only one part of the whole life satisfaction. If one affords their routing costs of living, then s/he can spend the rest of their money on their hobbies. A secure job helps people to respect their hobbies and focus on what they like to do. Going to the cinema to watch a favorite movie, attending a music class to learn how to play violin, registering in a swimming class, taking regular trips are all examples of hobbies and activities which brings pleasure to people's lives. Even if one's job is not enough satisfactory, by choosing just a secure job, s/he can spend their money on what is entertaining and joyful to them; so that experience the sense of pleasure.
In summary, all the presented ideas above bring us to the conclusion that choosing a secure job, right away, is better than waiting to find a satisfying one. This is owing to the fact that not only one can better their life, but also s/he can get to pleasure by spending money on their hobbies. Thus, I would recommend all my friends and acquaintances to choose a secure job instead of a satisfying one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... job is one the most crucial aspects of ones life; as people spend almost 1/3 of the...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ecurity. In this case, although the job is satisfying, because of not having the essential se...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ings pleasure to peoples lives. Even if ones job is not enough satisfactory, by choo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, as to, in summary, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56175298805 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50852105712 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462151394422 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1398988677 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.090909091 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291989381037 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109457471468 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102546167506 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210927239761 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917097053878 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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