By and large, all people encounter numerous situations in their lives, which require to make proper decisions. These situations would be easy problems such as choosing which kind of style to wear in a birthday party, to complex dilemmas such as choosing right university major, right job, or even a romantic one-whom one should marry. These problems occur for every person at any age, including young people. There is a moot point in this case as to how much young people today, depend on their parents compared to past. An outstanding argument states that in the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them, but today they are better able to make decisions for their lives. I strongly concur with it. In the ensuing lines, I will delve into two reasons to amply substantiate my thesis.
The first reason which deserves some words is that by the flourish of the hectic lifestyle, parents can less take care of their children's decisions. The modern life has made people busier and by the dwindling time, parents have to devote to their children, they have to grow and act more independently. Regarding this fact, young people today get familiar since their early ages with making easy to hard situations. Gradually they develop better abilities to make decent decisions. This has caused them to act and decide more wisely compared to the youth in the past decades. For example, my cousin compared to me was grown in a condition that he was alone most of the time. He had to do his works independently. Now he relies less on his parents than me, when I was at the same age as him, for doing his various tasks including making a decision when facing complicated dilemmas.
The second reason occurring to my mind is that the advent of new technologies has made young children become more aware. In the past, access to information was much lower than nowadays. People were less educated and parents make decisions for their children intuitively. Parents had to make use of their knowledge and experience to guide their young children. However, by the gradual progress of information technology, the new generation has become more aware of their surrounding facts. Access to Online courses, Question and answer forums and most importantly the search engines, are all product of invention of the internet. Younger people are now even more aware and educated than their parents in a wide variety of areas of knowledge. Hence they can easily make decisions on their own.
In summary, all the presented ideas above get us to the conclusion that, young children today, much less dependent on their parent for making decisions, compared to past. This is not only because of the hectic life, that has made young children act more independently but also because of the progress of technologies that have made people more informed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...ituations in their lives, which require to make proper decisions. These situations woul...
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Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to right'
Suggestion: to right
...y, to complex dilemmas such as choosing right university major, right job, or even a ...
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Line 5, column 742, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...n a wide variety of areas of knowledge. Hence they can easily make decisions on their...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, as to, for example, in summary, kind of, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90515463918 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5357555736 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505154639175 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6399013157 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.16 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167845246406 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497313286508 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501312366326 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1081898377 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478317214703 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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