TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

After industrialization, the diversity of works increased rapidly and people were able to choose their jobs instead of continuing their father's job. These days, having a suitable job is one of the most important issues in each society. In many countries having a secure job is going to be inaccessible, hence I think if people have an opportunity to get a secure job, they should not wait for a more satisfying one. I will elaborate my opinion on the following reasons.

First and foremost, people may not have a better opportunity in the future. Because their age is rising and many job positions have an age limitation; additionally, the economic condition in many countries is going to be worst. For instance, my brother had a job opportunity five years ago in a governmental company, but he did not apply for it because he wanted a better position. However, he did not find a job as satisfying as that job. Hence, I believe that people should not lose suitable job opportunities.

Second, folks can save their money and time. If they do not lose the initial and suitable job opportunities, they can start working early, therefore they will be able to save some money each month. On the contrary, if they wait until having a better job, they will start saving money very late. Hence, they cannot marry, buy a house or new cars on time and they will lose their healthy body before retirement.

Last but not least, many people can search for better positions while they are working. In my country, some job positions are contract works, means the workers are working for a few months or years. For instance, my cousin applied for a job three years ago, however, one year after that, he found a better position and easily applied for it and changed his job. Hence, in many countries, the employees can change their works easily if they find a better position. Hence, people should not lose suitable job opportunities because they can find a better position simultaneously.

To sum up, people should apply for suitable job opportunities and do not wait for a better position. Because, they may not find a better job in future and by finding a job early, they can save enough money for living, finally, some of the people are able to change their jobs after applying for it.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74623115578 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67005523722 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437185929648 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5658020011 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.45 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284756516193 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112241235272 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076801346938 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20033585699 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603987105295 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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