working is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Nowadays, many students graduate every year and they are caring about having a good position in the future. I am sure that many people believe that having a satisfied job it is the best case ever, while other might disagree. However, when it comes to me I strongly agree that we have to accept the secure job with the first offer. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, having a secure job will offer us a better life. Right now, many people are caring about their children and they need money to secure their lives. For instance, my brother is a doctor and he is working in a big hospital at New York. In fact, I remember after his graduation he was dreaming by find a job in a long term care facility, but he could not find a good opportunity. So, when he find a job as a doctor in a hospital he accepted that offer right away. This is because this hospital gave him a very good salary. Moreover, he would be able to enjoy his life with his family. For example, he can go with his family to enjoy their summer vacation abroad. In addition, he sent his son to learn in a multinational school. This is because he can afforded. On the other hand, my brother's friend was waiting for a good career after his graduation. Furthermore, he could not find his dream and he felt so frustrated. As a result, he but his family under stress. This experience taught me that we have to accept the the secure job opportunity to keep our future safe and get rid from feeling stressed that we are still waiting for satisfied position.
In addition, secure job can help us to cover all our expenses. Recently, every one if us has his own responsibilities and we have many duties every day. For example, may husband and I are parents for two little kids. every month, we have many issues we have to do such as we have to pay many bills like the internet bill, the rent, the day care fee, and we have to pay list food every week. So, we have to have a secure job to grantee that we can cover all of these expenses. Moreover, I believe that our family is the first priority in my life. As a result, I was vert important for my to accept the offer of secure job to have chance to keep my family is a good track. As you can see, having a stable job can provide us with basic salary to cover all of our monthly bills.
In sum, I strongly agree that we have to accept the secure job offer and we should not wait until we get our dream job. This is because, secure job can grantee better life for our family, and because we can pay for all our expenses. So, we have to encourage the fresh graduate students to accept the secure jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Working
working is considered one of the most important...
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Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...ot find a good opportunity. So, when he find a job as a doctor in a hospital he acce...
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Line 3, column 763, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'afford'
Suggestion: afford
...national school. This is because he can afforded. On the other hand, my brothers friend...
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Line 3, column 1026, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...rience taught me that we have to accept the the secure job opportunity to keep our futu...
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Line 3, column 1026, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...rience taught me that we have to accept the the secure job opportunity to keep our futu...
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Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Every
... and I are parents for two little kids. every month, we have many issues we have to d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25954198473 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31929201184 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421755725191 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1376950338 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.4 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228383679117 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685033049234 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557317971853 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157106171463 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00975395252785 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.44 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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