TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The reading and lecture both discuss using the buzzers at advertisements. While the reading states three critics of buzzers at adevrtisemnets, the student who acted as a buzzer before refutes these claims. He said none of these claims are convincing.

Firstly, the reading avers that customers should know if the buzzers got paid to pormote the product or not. This is because the buzzer who got paid will not tell the truth. On the other hand, the students argues this notion by saying that the company try to find people who used their products. In addition, they should be convinced by these products. For example, he was a buzzer at mobile company and he used the product and recognized that it was great. So, the buzzer can tell the truth.

In addition, the article shows that the consumers believe whatever buzzers say about their products. Therefore, the customers might get hurted. Howerver, the students refutes this point by explaining that many people asked him many questions about the product. For instance, they asked him about price and services. If he did not know the answers of these questions,they will not going to buy it.

Lastly, the reading mentions that buzzing has a negative affect on the social realationships. Nevertheless, the students rejects this idea by pointing out that if privte buzzer give the truth about the products and people used these products and love it. As a result, people will trust the buzzers and get more close.consequently, both of them will have a truthful relationship and buzzers will be open to peopl

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...their products. In addition, they should be convinced by these products. For exam...
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Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
... not know the answers of these questions,they will not going to buy it. Lastly, th...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...nswers of these questions,they will not going to buy it. Lastly, the reading menti...
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Line 7, column 58, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ng mentions that buzzing has a negative affect on the social realationships. Nevertheless...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, lastly, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 262.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97328244275 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72087080344 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526717557252 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7344573746 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6470588235 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4117647059 21.698381199 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.70588235294 7.06452816374 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287351646825 0.272083759551 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893827601408 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446877767988 0.0662205650399 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173436064935 0.162205337803 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613080116793 0.0443174109184 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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