Education plays a pivotal role in our lives. It is believed that the more knowledge we gain, the more we will be successful in the future. Therefore, people try to enhance their knowledge as much as possible. People also concern about the question whether parents in the past are involved in their children's education than parents today are. This issue draws different ideas from people. Some people believe that obviously before parents concerned about their children's studies than parents today do. Others would not agree with this statement. In my observation, in the past the education of children is the foremost concern of their parents. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, parents today spend too much time on their jobs and workplaces. Therefore, they have very little time to their children. We all acknowledge that previously, usually only father went to work. Mother stayed at home to take care of their children and their housework. Therefore, mother had time to concern about their children's education. However, today in a family most both parents go to work. They work during weekdays. Sometimes parents work on weekend as well. In fact, during the days they spend a lot of energy to do their jobs. Thus in the evening, when they come home, they would like to have some times to relax. Likewise, most time when parents get home, their children already go to bed. Therefore, they do not have time to care about their children much as parents in the past did. My friend is a compelling example of this case. His parents work far from home. Therefore, during weekdays they stay in their workplaces. His parents just meet him on weekend. He told me that his parents have no time to care about his studies.
Secondly, children today do not want to depend on their parents much, particularly in their studies. People admit that they are living in a modern society with the help of the internet. It seems to me that people can find everything on the internet. This phenomenon also impact on children's thought. They tend to decide their own education, such as which university they would like to apply and which major they are interested in to learn in the university. They do not want to ask their parents for getting their advice or opinions. To be more specific, last month my best friend asked me some questions about how to choose his major in the university. I questioned her that why did not you ask your parents. She answered me immediately that she never confer with her parents about her studies.
In conclusion, each of us has our own ideas about the issue; do parents in the past involve in their children's education than parents today do? In my opinion, I strongly support my idea that indeed parents in the past are more involved in their children's education than parent today are because parents today are busy at work and children today are really want to being independent in their studies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... as possible. People also concern about the question whether parents in the past are involved in the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...spend a lot of energy to do their jobs. Thus in the evening, when they come home, th...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'wanted'.
Suggestion: wanted
...y at work and children today are really want to being independent in their studies. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, likewise, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77131782946 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43848665661 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443798449612 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.6003584229 180% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8836260372 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.5405405405 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9459459459 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24324324324 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 20.0 4.88709677419 409% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354834311893 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925373043232 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914744105323 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262390170254 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103663497247 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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