TPO 29- Integrated writing

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TPO 29- Integrated writing

The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about Edmontosaurus which survived in the North Slope winter during cold winter. In the text, the author mentions that migration to more temperate zones to find food as a possible reason for their survival. The lecturer, on the other hand, challenges all the mentioned arguments and believes that none of them is convincing.

Firstly, the author states Edmontosaurus's diet to support migration hypothesis since plants, which were necessary for Edmontosaurs survival, could not grow in harsh climate. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that there were a lot of dead plants for Edmontosaurus as food sources to eat in the dark and cold North Slope winter. Moreover, she further explains that the climate was very warmer than nowadays in the North Slope in the past, and plant had excellent chance to grow in summer by accessing to sun's energy.

Moreover, the author asserts that Edmontosaurus lived in herd which can be a strong support for their migration to other places. The speaker, in the contrary, points out that animals may live in herd to gain other advantages such as being protected by predators. Besides, she says that some animals, such as modern Rozevelt elk have been living in herd in forest in the United state, but they do not migrate to other locations.

Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that Edmontosaurus were capable of migrating long distances. On the other hand, the lecturer posits that all the Edmontosaurus were not adults to migrate long distances. Furthermore, juvenile were not able to have a long journey, and they would slow down all other members in Edmontosaurus herd. Thus, adults Edmontosaurus had not abandon their offspring in cold climate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'sun'.
Suggestion: sun
...hance to grow in summer by accessing to suns energy. Moreover, the author asserts...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... summer by accessing to suns energy. Moreover, the author asserts that Edmontosaurus ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 382, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'abandoned'.
Suggestion: abandoned
...erd. Thus, adults Edmontosaurus had not abandon their offspring in cold climate.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, may, moreover, so, thus, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 290.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06551724138 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74154196004 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544827586207 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4162133774 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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