TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

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TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

There is no doubt that nowadays, people's working hours is different from that of past due to the complexity of humankind' career. This brings up a controversial question concerning with people' working hours: Is it more enjoyable to have three-day work with an extended working hours? In my perspective, I disagree with this idea. The reasons behind this viewpoint are discussed in the following paragraphs in a detail way.
To begin with, the first thing that immediately comes to mind is that working for long hours in a day will be exhausting. Workers arrive late to the home and stay up early in the next day. When a worker works until late at night, they perform a lot of tasks in their work. These tasks make workers and employees tire, which they feel uncomfortable. Additionally, waking up early in the morning and staying up more time active during at night, cause to employees become unfocused during the time they are involve in performing their duties in the workplace. As a result of this, the workers and employees productivity decrease rapidly.
The second and important reason that support my standpoint is that people could not spend time with their families in the three days a week. In fact, when they arrive late to the home from their career, all of his children are dormant or even his wife is in a deep sleep. If the employees three days of a week allocate their time to job, they could not spend time with their children so that they cannot be aware about their children's education. Besides, workers will not be able to communicate with their wife in order to provide emotional support for them. Not only that, but also when one of their family members such as their father or mother get sick, they cannot visit their family members for the sake of supplying emotional support. So, as you can see, another consequences of working long hours in three days a week is dedicating less time for family.
On the other side, there is one justification to have a job, where a person works three days a week. Indeed, people could devote the remaining days of week for leisure activities. Individuals will be able to arrange a short trip to visit another county. They can take their children to the parks such as Disney land or to a recognized restaurant in order to eat lunch. Moreover, they can travel to nearby cities in order to visit tourism attraction of their own country. Consequently, people will have enjoyable moments in the rest of weeks.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that the job with an extended working hours in three days a week is not a good idea, because individual not only feel exhausted for the rest of the week, but also they will not able to dedicate time for family members, although one should consider the advantageous of working extremely more hours in three days. How will be a job enjoyable, if you will hasten to terminate your duties in the three days?

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hour'?
Suggestion: hour
...three-day work with an extended working hours? In my perspective, I disagree with thi...
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Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e following paragraphs in a detail way. To begin with, the first thing that imme...
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Line 2, column 505, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
...come unfocused during the time they are involve in performing their duties in the workp...
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Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erminate your duties in the three days?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72514619883 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58370723808 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469785575049 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5079379202 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320675324357 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962014306527 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994414973731 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195680967494 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615426349918 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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