TPO 30 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours Use spec

It is critically important for us to not only work productively but also care about other aspects of our life. Personally, I believe that working for longer hours for three days a week is more delightful. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in this situation we can be more focused on our work and as a result, we can do our job more efficiently so this can improve our productivity as well. Most tasks that we deal with today in our career, need problem-solving therefore they require so much time and energy. In my opinion, it will take some time for us to completely understand the subject and all its facets. Consequently, most of the work would be left incomplete if we dedicate fewer hours to it and the next day, we need to review it again to see from where we should continue which is time-consuming. My own experience is a compelling illustration of this. Last summer I did an internship and I had to start my work at 10 and finish at 14. I was told to work on an ultrasound device and I had to fix its available bugs and also add some new features to it. I had to do all these by microprocessors and it was my first time working with these so I needed to work so hard in the initial steps to find out how to start to do each part, but the problem was I only had 4 hours a day which was not enough time for me to get concentrated and finish part of the job. The result was that it took a long time for me to make the improvements I was asked which could be done faster if I had an opportunity to work for more hours per day. This example demonstrates how working for longer hours can be more productive.
Furthermore, I think when we work for only three days a week, we have more free time to travel and bond with our family so this really helps us to improve our mental health and become happier people. For instance, about two years ago due to Coronavirus circumstances, my dad decided to work only three days a week and spend the rest time at home with us. He started to read more books and spend more time with my little brother as a result our family has become more intimate and all of us feel more satisfied.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it’s a great idea for people to work three days a week for longer hours. This is because people can do their job more effectively and also, they can spend much time doing other activities which can improve their happiness and satisfaction of life.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 451, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...would be left uncomplete if we dedicate less hours for it and the next day, we need to rev...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 451, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...would be left uncomplete if we dedicate less hours for it and the next day, we need ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, really, so, well, while, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25325884544 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50339317321 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450651769088 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7973333384 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.818181818 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4090909091 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265717978745 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913373255217 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794974087958 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190187488442 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231008392354 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.67 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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