Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important for children to use their time properly and efficiently. Personally, I believe that kids should not spend their time playing computer games since it’s a completely time-wasting activity. I feel this way for 2 reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, playing computer games has no advantage and it doesn’t really contain something useful for kids so these activities can harm their education. Children need to do things that help them to learn something or experience a valuable feeling. In my opinion, doing profitless tasks will lead to difficulties in kids’ studies and school works. My own experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was 13 years old, I was so much addicted to computer games and I used to play them even before doing my homework. The situation got worse when I had final exams but I was still playing those games. The conclusion was my awful grades on that year. This example demonstrates how computer games can affect our life in a bad manner.
Secondly, this kind of playing in long term will damage kids’ health too since all these games are done by monitors which make eyes vulnerable. Thanks to the rapid growth of technology, nowadays we’re doing almost everything with our laptops, tablets and cell-phones such as: educating via online courses, contacting with our friends by social media, etc. This means that using these devices for important works is inevitable therefore, it’s not rational to use them for dispensable tasks like computer games cause in that case there maybe irrecoverable damages. For instance, my cousin used to play computer games for long hours everyday when he was young and this was the reason why he started to use glasses. His parents and his doctor warned him that his eyes’ weakness will get worse if he does not lessen the time he was spending on those games but unfortunately he didn’t take those advices serious and the result was that now he is wearing very heavy glasses and last year when he asked his doctor about laser surgery to get rid of the glasses, the doctor told him that the level of the weakness of his eyes is too much, consequently he can’t do that operation and he has to continue to his life with those boring glasses.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that wasting time on playing computer games is completely worthless and children should avoid that. This is because these entertainments cause troubles in kids’ educating duties, and because such hobbies can lead to irretrievable suffering in their health and especially their eyes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a bad manner" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... how computer games can affect our life in a bad manner. Secondly, this kind of playing in lo...
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Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...d to play computer games for long hours everyday when he was young and this was the reas...
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Line 4, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...their health and especially their eyes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94533029613 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65364611101 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537585421412 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 103.766416223 48.9658058833 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 120.611111111 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3888888889 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24994371825 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913611880779 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735039948681 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176168276887 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449883477285 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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