Some people believe that video games are great method to raise children’s creativity. However, I do not agree with this idea and would like to explain my opinion with some examples as below.
First, video games may be helpful to increase a creativity to some children, but not great way. Generally speaking, other ways such as books, movies, TV shows are mainly regarded as great methods to grow creativity. That is why most schools recommend children reading books and watching good movies for creativity, not playing video games. For example, most CEOs of worldwide innovating companies read lots of books to keep their creative thinking for endless innovation and they strongly recommend children to do the same.
Second, video games have too many disadvantages to children, even though they may have an advantage learning creativity to some children. The main disadvantages of video games are to become lack of concentration and to be addictive by playing games too much. So, children should be careful in playing video games not to have the mentioned bad effects. For instance, one Korean university professor strongly insists that government should enact video games as an addictive one like drugs, because they are so harmfully affect to children’s mental health.
To sum up, video games are not so helpful for children to get the creativity and even they have seriously bad effects to mental conditions if children play them for long time. In this regard, I do not support the video games’ usage for increasing children’s creativity.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 252.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17063492063 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71981185805 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563492063492 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3194728735 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.583333333 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216903146634 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983534009901 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055293835805 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146299463941 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357825087996 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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