Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Playing computer games is a waste of time Children should not be allowed to play them Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Video games are one of the best innovations in the 20th century. It is thought by some people that children should not be allowed to play them because it is such a waste of time. However, In my view, children should learn how to play those fascinating games. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore as follows.

First of all, playing computer games would help children to learn new things in a new form, which traditional learning would not offer to them. Video games could stimulate children creativity and enhance their logic. For example, statistics have shown that 95 percent of children who played video games were able to quickly adjust themselves to challenge situations and be able to solve puzzles. Compare that with counterparts who did not developed these practical skills. Playing video games is not only entertaining, but also children gain a sense of achievement. According to this, kids should be allowed to play video games in their spare time.

In addition, perhaps most importantly, playing these games could enrich family life. Children like to play with adults and other kids. They prefer to ask questions and enjoy playing as a team. Moreover, during the game children could strengthen the family relationship with their parents or siblings. Playing in a group could help kids to achieve victory through dedication that they learn through the game culture. For instance, a couple of decades ago, when I was a child, I played with my brother video games when we had free time. One of the reasons why I played with him was because I wanted to had a better relationship with him. We use to fight all the time with each other because we disagreed for everything. Nevertheless, playing with him, helped us to see each other differently. We saw that we liked being on each others company and playing together. Because of these video games, which most of the time require two or more people to play them, helped me to have a better relationship with my brother. That is why kids should play these games, so their relationship[ with family members could be improved.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that children should play computer games. This is because they could enrich family life, and because children could learn new skills and broaden their knowledge by entertaining themselves.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 640, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... had a better relationship with him. We use to fight all the time with each other b...
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Line 5, column 1078, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: ']' seems to be missing
... play these games, so their relationship[ with family members could be improved. ...
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Line 5, column 1078, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis
Suggestion: [
... play these games, so their relationship[ with family members could be improved. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92111959288 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58804019961 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493638676845 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1636170834 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5833333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34828345353 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117304770688 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703041152244 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223413851157 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617941144949 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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