Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A controversial issue relating to whether successful people learn different skills, or they focus on one particular skill, has brought to the attention of relevant authorities. Many people believe that people who are master in something make them successful in life. On the contrary, in my view, individuals will reach easily their success if they try to develop different skills.
First of all, learning new skills will help people to become more resilient and never give up their goals. To put it in other words, if people are able to learn new skills, which will come handy in the long run, they will be able to accomplish their goals. My experience is a compelling example of this matter. About a decade ago, when I came to America, I settled up my only goal, which was that I had to study hard in order to get my professional licence. As the years passed by, I went through a lot of obstacles. In fact, I think every one who approaches this path, it will face those difficulties. However, I always kept the attitude of never giving up, no matter what problem I had to face. I learned and developed new skills, which helped me to step forward. As a result of my optimistic state of mind, I kept going on. If I had given up to my goal, I would never have succeeded, and practice my profession, which I have passion on. Overall, this experience tells us that people should be resilient in order to succeed.
Furthermore, perhaps most importantly, developing new skills such as learn how to strongly communicate with others and be a good negotiator, it will lead people toward success. For instance, when my brother graduated from engineering school, he wanted to open his own business. It was hard for him because in order to be a successful businessman, he had to develop new skills such as how to effectively express his ideas and take good decisions. He attended a program, where he learned how to approach in different situations and what language to use. After he finished the communication classes, he became a master of the language and, as a result of that a good negotiator. Hence, it turned out that his business was one of the much accomplished businesses in our town. According to my brother's experience, it is clear that people should learn new skills in order to reach their goals.
In conclusion, people should be able to learn newer skills in order to reach success. This is because different skills will help them to become resilient, and make them reach their goals as they become good negotiators.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 837, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...te of minded, I kept going on. If I had gave up to my goal, I would have never succe...
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Line 3, column 876, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
... gave up to my goal, I would have never succeed, and practice my profession, which I ha...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, in my view, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67573696145 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71516551153 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485260770975 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2826569435 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.652173913 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1739130435 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.39130434783 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215657066275 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669491363012 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710707178612 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1650713695 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845797271296 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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