Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, traveling has become one of the most essential parts of people’s lives. Many people think that traveling around their own country is better than having a trip to foreign countries. However, in my view, all generations could benefit from their journey around the world.
First of all, people who travel nation wide would have the opportunity to learn new things. When individuals travel, they would be able to learn the language of the country that they are going to. Learning how to speak a particular language, which identifies the country that you are visiting, it is a necessity because people need to communicate in order to be able to move around and understand effectively. On the contrary, if people do not learn the language, they might not understand anything, which would lead to frustration, instead of enjoying every moment of that journey. For instance, around ten years ago, I went to Paris. One of the reasons for my visit there was to learn about the country’s history. In addition, I had to learn the basis of the language before visiting the place, so that I could better understand the history. As a result of that, I expanded my knowledge and enriched my thinking in a foreign language. Overall, people who travel abroad would be able to benefit more by learning a new language.
Furthermore, traveling to foreign nations would help people to extend their social circle. People could have the chance to make new friends, whose perspectives are different because their culture is not the same as theirs. An example of this is my experience in Paris. During the time that I spent in Paris, I made new friends. They were different from me, which sparked my interest in building a good relationship with them. Although, I currently have many native friends, having the opportunity to expand my social circle while in a different nation is enriching. I was excited to surrender myself with people who thought not the same way as me. My new friendships exist as of today, and have made my life meaningful, colorful, and joyful. If I had never traveled to a foreign country, I would never have built new friendships. According to this, journeys that people take would help them to widen their friendship network throughout their lives.
In conclusion, this essay clearly demonstrates that people who travel abroad would benefit more than many of them who just travel to native places. One benefit is that individuals could learn a new language and widen their social network.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 33, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
...rld. First of all, people who travel nation wide would have the opportunity to learn new...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my view, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93017456359 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65127042997 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493765586035 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6519933979 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9565217391 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4347826087 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08695652174 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259784936398 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779686507223 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062432521122 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184960208132 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572807408419 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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