Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, our lives have drastically changed. People behave differently than they did a decade ago. Their demands are different than ever. It is thought by some people that investing in public transportation will make people's life easy. Others disagree with this statement, they would rather prefer that government is responsible for spending money to sophisticate the internet service, where everyone could have access to it. In my opinion, as a vital factor, the government should immediately improve internet service around the nation.
To begin with, having Internet access in today's life is urgent because people work from their homes, without the need to commute. For example, according to statistics 78 percent of the populations are self-employed, their jobs are depending on the use of the Internet. If people do not have Internet service, they would not have a job. Therefore, their lives would be miserable. The government, is the only higher institution that should take care of its citizen's needs. In this case, they should make it easy for individuals to have access to a good quality of Internet.
Secondly, without hesitation some individuals could say that improving public transportation will fix only one problem, but the advancement of Internet will solve many problems if it is available for everyone around the nation. For instance, a high speed internet could solve the problem of the employment in the entire country. Also it could make peoples life easy because they could use it as a resource to educate themselves, and the list of benefits of having a good Internet goes on and on. According to this, people could benefit by solving too many problems, which they may face throughout their daily lives if they have access to the Internet. That's why the government should seriously consider to allocate some founds into that perspective.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government should invest money in improving Internet access. This is because the majority of people are going to use internet as the primary source of their job, so that they might not need to use public transportation at all. And because the Internet will solve more than one problem, compare that with only one issue of improving public transportation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...decade ago. Their demands are different than ever. It is thought by some people that...
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Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... investing in public transportation will make peoples life easy. Others disagree ...
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Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Internet) must be used with a third-person verb: 'accesses'.
Suggestion: accesses
...ion. To begin with, having Internet access in todays life is urgent because people...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...pulations are self-employed, their jobs are depending on the use of the Internet. If people d...
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Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...f the employment in the entire country. Also it could make peoples life easy because...
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Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...es if they have access to the Internet. Thats why the government should seriously con...
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Line 5, column 695, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider allocating'.
Suggestion: consider allocating
...ats why the government should seriously consider to allocate some founds into that perspective. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17119565217 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78091910109 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491847826087 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8056221726 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.15 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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