Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

A controversial issue relating to advertisement make the product more attractive or not, has been brought to the attention of general public. In my opinion, advertisements always make products look good and attractive.

First of all, coming with a plan or strategy, advertisements make product look much better than they are in reality. Not only the advertisements promote a message an idea by putting the item in a proper place and matching the colors, but also, demonstrate a high value of the product. For example, if the advertisement is about to promote an item that is favorable for kids, the organizers that work on advertisement industry will make that product not only to give a message but to look attractive on the kid's eyes. Furthermore,the message that the commercial is going to give, it will easily be understand by children. That would gravitate them toward the desire to own that product. Overall, according to this practice, advertisements really make products appear nice, neat and desirable.

Second of all, commercial companies always are looking to innovate models that would make their customers to purchase their goods without thinking twice. To be more specific, evidence has shown that product that are advertised, had been sold in matter of days, and even more sometimes those items are not available. If the demand is significantly increased, then it is clear that the advertisement has done its job. The goods are sold. That is why advertisements make the product look in their best state of attraction, so that those could be sold right away.

In conclusion, advertising should be strategic and innovative. This is because the power of promotion makes the items look not only good, but also increase their value and that help for the number of sells to reach out a high level.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...t, has been brought to the attention of general public. In my opinion, advertisements always m...
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Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...attractive on the kids eyes. Furthermore,the message that the commercial is going to...
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Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
... Second of all, commercial companies always are looking to innovate models that would m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, really, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05333333333 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96195130878 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536666666667 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.478755057 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.066666667 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181114585361 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686089797007 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670812021333 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110256605042 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601368086358 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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