Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays people are very well aware of how to spend their time effectively. It is thought by some people that people should focus on doing things that they should do by not wasting their time. However, I strongly believe that people should be flexible and try everything regardless if they like or not. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, adults should be able to step out of their comfort zone because that would help them to gain skills that sometimes are very useful in life. People who tend to explore new things, that might give them an opportunity to expand their experience in things which could lead to new innovation or spark their curiosity and creativity. For example, many of the new enterprises that are created today are the result of new or incidental ideas. Although many people try to be as comfortable as possible, they should endeavor new things in order to succeed. Overall, I believe that taking risks and putting effort on completely new things would help people to broaden their horizon.

Secondly, People who stay always in their bubble, would not be able to enhance their interpersonal skills. Adults need to improve themselves to learn different kinds of things, so that they can become more interested in meeting people by expanding their social network and experiencing challenges. For instance, my example as an adult who likes learning new things, even though they are very challenging, is a compelling example of this. A decade ago, when I came to America it was very hard to find a job in the pharmacy field. I applied everywhere but it did not work out. I decided to try something completely new from my profession. I worked as a beauty advisor at a beauty shop. At that job I learned new skills and met with different open minded people who helped me later on to find a job as a pharmacist. That is why I think that trying to experience new things may help people to overcome challenges sometimes just by surrounding themselves and by expanding their social circle with minded people.

To sum up, people should try to do things that they do not like doing. That is because they could learn from those experiences and because they could overcome their challenges just by meeting new people who could help them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d their experience in things which could lead to new innovation or spark their cu...
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Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...perience in things which could lead to new innovation or spark their curiosity and creativity...
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Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hing completely new from my profession. I worked as a beauty advisor at a beauty ...
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Line 5, column 825, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... find a job as a pharmacist. That is why I think that trying to experience new th...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ngs that they do not like doing. That is because they could learn from those expe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78109452736 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57377951302 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497512437811 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2202159651 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231993763164 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829572943977 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12546169471 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18931885556 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105520786338 0.0645574589148 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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