Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having a secure job is vital for a good quality of life. Many people think that in the past people could easily find their future careers, which lead to their successful foreseeable future. Others, however, disagree with this notion. In my opinion, people had faced challenges at any time in the past and even today.
First of all, the system that we have today was still in the building process. The demand for the work force was higher than it is today, and that made individuals think that it was easy to find a secure job. To illustrate, Three decades ago, foreigner pharmacists, who moved to the United States could easily get the licence in order to practice their profession. After they got their licence they worked and their job was secure because the demand for that position was significantly high. That is why, today most of that generation think that in the past, it was easier to find a secure profession than it is in this time of age.
Another reason why it was not easy in the past to find a career is because the bureaucracy was even higher than it appears today. Not all the professions were in high demand for workers. In those fields, adults had to have very strong connections, so that they could secure their job. Actually, the same practice is been applied somehow even today, no matter what field you are working in or like to work. For instance, my grandmother told me that when she was young, her father was an outgoing person and had a wide social network, and because of those connections, he could find a secure job for my grandmother. At that time, people could not successfully navigate the choppy waters of the bureaucracy and poverty. According to this true story, in the past, people might have been through a lot of obstacles before they had found a decent job.
In conclusion, there was not easy to identify the desired career in the past. This is because the demand for work force might have been only for one profession rather than all disciplines; therefore, people who were lucky enough to have been part of that group of civilians think that it was easy to identify a career back in the old days. Also, decades ago, the bureaucracy might had not helped people to secure their jobs.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62533692722 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32038997732 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6908485087 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3157894737 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181506530216 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656908593969 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469014711453 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12002485976 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238481861415 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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