Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Art reflects people's creativity, which might have been stimulated by different situations that they had experienced throughout their lives. It is thought by some people that sports are more attractive to the majority of people, and therefore, the government should invest in improving them. However, I am of the opinion that art is the treasure of a country, so that the government should take into account spending money to support the art work.

First of all, the art work , which is collected by the authorities reflect the history of each country. The best art work of famous artists such as sculptors, painters and musicians demonstrate the moments of the time that past generations lived. To be more specific, a decade ago, when I was in university, I took an art course, I knew a little about art. After I finished that course, I deeply understood that the creativity of individuals should be respected, and the value of the art work is forever lasting. Overall, the government should preserve these treasures and invest in supporting people, who create art and reward them for their unique artistic work.

Secondly, contrary to the belief that sport is another field that people love the most compare to other entertainment activities, so that the sports should be taken into consideration by the government's investments. Evidence has shown that people actually were more attracted to the creative artistic work. For example, statistics have revealed that 87 percent of people were attracted to the art work, especially the work of national artists, compare that with the counterparts, who preferred sports activities. According to this, the government must invest in art at any level of it because the majority of citizens enjoy looking at the art work more than anything else.

In conclusion, the government's founds should be allocated in art work. This is because the art represents the history of the country itself, and because people like more to look at the art work by getting inspired and feel better rather than watching Olympic teams.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10059171598 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7854168765 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6285438015 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.142857143 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184270479503 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734820644738 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534207342855 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128705238502 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330596242739 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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