Do you agree or disagree with the following statement One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part time job Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is an ongoing debate between parents who think that a teen is not mature enough to work and parents who believe that encourage their children to work any kind of job would help them to be better adults. I strongly believe that parents should support their children by encouraging them to work. I feel that for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, parents who push their children to take any kind of part time job would play an important role in their growth. If children expose themselves to the real life, they would be familiar and aware about the outside world. They would be able to learn and broaden their horizon. Although, children are not prepare physically to handle long hours of work, they could be trained by working as part timers. Therefore, children who work can develop new skills that would help them in the future.

Secondly, it is crucial to consider the fact that parents who allow their teenagers to work would help them to develop their independence and learn how to become responsible for their lives. If teens would have never worked before they become adults, then they would never be well equipped with knowledge that are related to the real life. For example, about two decades ago, when I was a teenager, I had to work because my family's budget was very tight. I worked in different kinds of jobs, where I developed different skills, which helped me later on to face challenge situations. Therefore, I became mature enough to critically think about issues that crossed my way. I felt that the independence that I gained throughout that period of time. made me an integrated and a better person. My parents were proud of me and had faith on me. Overall, I firmly believe that parents should encourage their children to work during their free time, so that they could gain Independence and become responsible in the foreseeable future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...push their children to take any kind of part time job would play an important role in the...
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Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'prepared'.
Suggestion: prepared
...eir horizon. Although, children are not prepare physically to handle long hours of work...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be well equipped with knowledge that are related to the real life. For example, a...
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Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eal life. For example, about two decades ago, when I was a teenager, I had to wor...
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Line 5, column 733, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ependence that I gained throughout that period of time. made me an integrated and a better per...
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Line 5, column 749, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Made
... gained throughout that period of time. made me an integrated and a better person. M...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78614457831 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4409914335 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515060240964 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2626894944 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4705882353 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225574051412 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785568090961 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064959931515 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176526359406 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270555667307 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments