Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well.
Without a doubt, humanity has shown throughout history that we are never satisfied with what we have; however, this has been overall positive driving force for progress. I firmly believe that successful people always try new things even though they know that it would be risky.
First of all, successful individuals have the ability to continually innovate, which would never happen if one were satisfied all the time. We find the need for new things through dissatisfaction. For instance, statistics have revealed that more 87 percent of rich citizens invest their money experimenting new projects. Compare that with counterparts who did not have that economic level. They did not contribute to any of these new ideas because of the fear of losing their money. Overall, prominent people always risk because they want to get a sense of achievement.
Furthermore, contrary to the belief that people are successful because they are masters of something and never take risks, Many argue that happiness of reaching the goals comes from contentment of situation, but this is not how the world works. being aware of discontentment leads to desire for change, which fuels modernization.For example, it is widely acknowledge that medical breakthroughs, such as the discoveries of antibiotics have had a far reaching impact. Before that people died because did not have good treatments to prevent infections. The fact that people are never satisfied with a current situation, has been a positive incentive for evolution.
In conclusion, successful people always have been trying new ideas. This is because their economic level has allowed them to invest in such deeds and because of the necessity for wanting more or seeking something different from what they currently have. Therefore, rich people tend to do something to change things for the better. Having the economic opportunity makes the process of innovation real in time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'goals'' or 'goal's'?
Suggestion: goals'; goal's
...ny argue that happiness of reaching the goals comes from contentment of situation, bu...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Being
...n, but this is not how the world works. being aware of discontentment leads to desire...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...e for change, which fuels modernization.For example, it is widely acknowledge that ...
^^^
Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'acknowledged'.
Suggestion: acknowledged
...modernization.For example, it is widely acknowledge that medical breakthroughs, such as the...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 34, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have always been
...on. In conclusion, successful people always have been trying new ideas. This is because their...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31596091205 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85347225273 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57328990228 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5129137566 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189327848905 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679330794625 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586166289291 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123389888106 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302257916027 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.