Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well.
In todays' progressive and competitive world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significance of being successful. When it comes to whether it's better t take risks or not, there are different ideas. Some people think that taking many risks is beneficial to achieving success; others hold the opposite opinion; they believe it's better to do what is the person is sure they can easily handle that. From my vantage point, the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my reasons.
First, taking risks and doing new things allows the person to discover many valuable experiences which could help them achieving high-level performance and success. For more explanation, by trying un new things a person would reach astonishing findings that it was impossible to understand them from books or other information sources. One increases the chance to find so many ways to do just one task and choosing the best method. Although, at first glance, trial and error could be frustrating and a whole wasting of time, after that, due to the experiences we have gained, we always have the chance to choose the fastest way to accomplish our works. Experience is gold, and taking risks equips one with this valuable gold; therefore, it's not surprising that someone assertive enough to take risky decisions becomes a successful one.
Secondly, taking risk is a reasonable implication of openness, eagerness, and consistency, which are other factors of prosperity. More specifically, people who try new things and are open to new experiences also are assertive. As they don't afraid of failure, they seem to be more consistent and don't give up until they get what they want. This characteristic also implies eagerness. All these features aside from risk-taking could predict significant breakthrough feats, if not immediately, but absolutely. For illustrate, imagine someone who always clings to old cliches, because of an extreme obsess about failure couldn't do new things and compare such person with one who is assertive and doesn't give up, even if their plans completely break down. It is obvious that the second one will finally find his way to be successful.
In conclusion, I think for being successful it is better to take risks because it increases our knowledge about our work, and gives us more choices to decide which one is the best way to do our task. As well, openness to new experiences is a good implication for the existence of other factors of being successful such as eagerness, consistency, and avoiding wrong stereotypes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05164319249 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81830950722 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558685446009 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7565336089 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.263157895 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285115744793 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805991762906 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737916910611 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178686684863 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02621240221 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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