People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do—rather than doing things they should do.
It is undeniable that people have undergone living in a competitive world. In which atmosphere how they were spending their limited time has become a vociferous topic. While some people stand that people spend more time working ever before, others believe that lives have been created to accomplish one main goal "happiness." Personally speaking, I firmly believe that nowadays comparing to actions should be done, people prone to consider their very gratification as a main priority. The reasons to support my viewpoint are vindicated in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, with the genesis of Technology, people have more time for doing their favorite activities. To clarify, today, the actions we should are not time-consuming anymore. Innovations made life more flexible than in the past, and people could save time from their duties to spend that on their entertainment. Imagine kitchen appliances; Cookery is a mandatory activity but using sandwich-maker, for example, preparing food, takes just a few minutes. Another example of high-tech help with time-saving is the phenomenon which so-called e-marketing. Thanks to the internet, shopping could be done in the blink of an eye; therefore, it is not hard to set aside time for favorite actions. These instances illustrate that modern life is that easy to have enough time to spend as one wishes.
Secondly, Technology has another influence on lifestyles. It serves so many focus-distracting things like cell phones. To clarify, I tell about my own experience; once I was writing an email, I saw an unexpected about a brand that I love on my phone screen and next, you know, I found myself surfing on the internet for half an hour. During that time, I totally forgot that I was writing an important email. As this example shows, high-tech, especially the internet, distract us from our duties to something we like to do.
inconclusion, I am for the opinion that people are spending their time how they aspire rather than by doing what should they do. As a result genesis of technology, many of mandatory activities are not time-consuming, as well it serves concentrate distracting innovation, so we easily distracted by those activities we love while doing necessary ones.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, you know, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04155124654 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86770904889 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551246537396 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 361.0 20.1344086022 1793% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1820.0 100.406767564 1813% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 361.0 20.6045352989 1752% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 105.0 5.45110844103 1926% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284451237901 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.284451237901 0.076458572812 372% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172809867691 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0970624254403 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 182.8 11.7677419355 1553% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -303.4 58.1214874552 -522% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 145.3 10.1575268817 1430% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.43 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.39 8.01818996416 317% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 10.002688172 590% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 146.4 10.0537634409 1456% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 59.0 10.247311828 576% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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