some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sch

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some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Parenting is one of the most challenging responsibilities of people who have children. This responsibility has gotten harder when parents are too busy to find enough time to spend with their kids. While some people believe that parents should spend their limited time with their children to do the kid's schoolwork, I definitely think that this time should be spent on sports and games.

To begin with, childhood is simply defined as a period in which one is of a high tendency to play and do enjoyable things. Deprived of spending time with their parents as they are busy, children feel alone, depressed, and without anyone to do something enjoyable. No one can turn a blind eye to this very natural need, which deserves attention. Neglecting this fundamental need could be harmful and may leave some mentally adverse effects. On the other hand, schoolwork is not something that requires to be done with someone else. Children could do their work independently and spend that time playing and having fun with their parents.

Besides, by playing, parents could assist their children in releasing their stress. Children are not skillful in managing their stress. They are naive and quickly become stressed by just a little pressure. Even worse, they are not capable enough to explain what they feel. But fortunately, they manifest their feelings in their playing. This helps parents detect that there is something wrong with their children and find some ways to prevent their problem from getting worse. This is applicable for sports as well. Doing sports is really helpful to seize stress. By physical activity, their brain will release some anti-depression and anti-anxiety hormones, providing them the energy they need to feel happy. Therefore, it is better to play games and sports with children.

In conclusion, it is better to play with children. This is helpful to fulfill their fundamental tendency to play, recognize their problems if there is, and help them alleviate their stress.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'kids'' or 'kid's'?
Suggestion: kids'; kid's
...ited time with their children to do the kids schoolwork, I definitely think that thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13190184049 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62132134715 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542944785276 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7291894232 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6666666667 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5238095238 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341603494499 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109876022301 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100851924379 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227561598857 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109800676432 0.0645574589148 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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