Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Thechnology in no longer an alien concept. People in every corner of the world are deal with its plus pionts and drawbacks as well. In this regard there are a lot of controvercial debates. Whether computer games, one of technologies presents to our era, plays in hands of man to upbring well-rounded children, or they are harmful and waste of time? There are different ideas. While some people consider playing games useful, from my vantage point they hinder childrens normal development in various ways.
The first reason make me feel this way is, the more kids spend time playing games, the less they spend time with their family which eventually wekean their family bond. To put it in a vivid picture, playing games are considerd as an addictive activity, and once the kids start engaging to playing games they will gradually increase the time to be satisfied. As a result they will lost track of time and forget about spend time with their family and take its toll on their connections. Therefore, playing computer games are a breeding ground to weaken family- bond and parents shouldout a curb on the using computers games for their offsprings.
The second reason is that, playing video games leave an adverse effect on childrens health. Sitting in front of computer for a long time sow the seeds of sedentary life style which cause to obesity, low metabolism, diabetes, aining a lot of extra weight. On the other hand playing the games that require more phisical activity and face to face communication with peers like football enhance childrens health and make them more happy. Moreover, in this way they will develop their ability to be a team player and learn how to be flexible enough to meet the requirements of their group. As a result, aiming to applying a health life-style and gain some nessesary life skills children should be prevented from playing such games.
All the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that playing video games are harmful. This is not only for the adverse effects of computer games have on kids family connections, but also it leads to a lot of hard to cure health issues, and hinder children to nurture their talents and become an well- adjusted as a group member.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 380, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
... to be satisfied. As a result they will lost track of time and forget about spend ti...
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Line 4, column 301, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ren to nurture their talents and become an well- adjusted as a group member.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51130959865 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555263157895 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0150026723 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.235294118 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314932292984 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977281871059 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668480671862 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190835821998 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472254145284 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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