The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The extended family is very important in one's life. It is thought by some people that in the past members of an extended family were closer than they are nowadays. However, in my view, the extended family is always important, no matter what time of age it is. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, in today's world, people tend to live where their job is located. They are focused on their individual life, rather than the life of the entire family. If their job is located completely in a different country, they would decide to leave right away and fulfill their needs without thinking about the rest of the family. However, that does not mean that their family members are not important. My experience as the youngest member of my family, is a compelling example of this. About two decades ago, I moved to another city because I found a new job, which was one of my best opportunities to advance in my career. I did not think twice, I left right away. Meanwhile, I had a very close relationship with my grandparents, and I knew that being fare from them would make me feel homesick. I loved them unconditionally and i missed them so much, but that does not mean that I did not care of them because I moved to another city. I called them every week to make sure they were doing fine. That means that they are and would be very important to me, regardless the circumstances. According to this experience, I believe that the importance of the extended family members was and it is crucial all the time.
Secondly, nowadays people are very private. People think differently than they did back in the day. They prefer to keep their things private by not sharing with other family members. They would be open only to those family members that they think are trustworthy and keep their secrets. This always depends on how close their relationships are. On the other hand, in the past people lived all together in one house, they could not keep secrets or be as private as they could be today. For example, my cousin who is my age, lived in the same house with my grandparents. She never felt to be close with my aunt, and always kept secrets from her. She wanted to keep her life private as possible. Since I was close to here she trusted me more than her aunt, and shared all her problems and asked me for advice. I was pleased to help because she was important to me. I respected her choice. Overall, people in this time of age think differently, they want to keep their private life separated from others, and that could give the impression that they are not important to other family members.
To sum up, I highly believe that the extended family is always important regardless the time. I hold this view because nowadays people's lifestyle has changed and that would give the impression that they do not think for their family members.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
The extend family is very important in ones live. ...
Line 3, column 835, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
...esick. I loved them unconditionally and i missed them so much, but that does not ...
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...rthy and keep their secrets. This always depends on how close their relationships...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50935550936 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44618780684 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467775467775 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0368142123 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.7931034483 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5862068966 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06896551724 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125869271082 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405530030193 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049460825947 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109365706128 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424951724774 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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