Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, our society is changed. Parents should be open minded and help their children in any way possible. Some may say that teenagers should be treated carefully because they may end up in a wrong direction. In my opinion, parents should encourage their younger adults to work any part time job that they will find it interesting.
First of all, by working the adolescents will grow personally and develop new skills. A great way to learn new skills is by getting involve in something, which they would be responsible as well. If parents support their kids financially all the time, they would not be motivated to do something different than their comfort zone. To illustrate, when I was a teenager, my cousin Tomas was the same age as I was. His father never allow him to work any kind of jobs. After Tomas finished college, he had to work to develop different skills because the job market required students that were already trained and prepared for a variety of tasks. He spent the entire year, trying to catch up with his weaknesses. Meanwhile, his friends were ready to deal with the real world. Actually, he felt disappointed that his father did not let him to work before he finished the college. According to this story, parents should really help their children by letting them working different kinds of jobs, so that they could grow personally and professionally.
Secondly, it is important to consider the fact that children could expand their network by just exposing themselves to different work environment. For instance, three decades ago, I was still an adolescent, I had to work because my family's budget was tight. I felt the responsibility to get out in the real world and find a job, which would have helped me to buy what I needed it. Moreover, I worked at the local library, where I not only learned how to communicate, but also met with different people from different backgrounds. Some of those people that I met back in the day, are still my friends even today as I write this essay.
Overall, by working part time, students would have the opportunity to expand their social circle.
In conclusion, parents should allow their children to work part time. This is because children will develop new skills that would help them later in their lives. And because they will be able to make new friends and meet people from different backgrounds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: saith; says
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Suggestion: part-time
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Suggestion: from
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81907090465 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60386491687 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520782396088 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.619125722 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6956521739 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7826086957 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04347826087 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171667232706 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542619267272 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593406690749 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110055332855 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038762570455 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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