Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, our lives are changed. People behave differently than they use to in the past. Many people believe that young generation is to liberal and they should obey more strict rules. Others, of course, disagree with this notion. In my opinion, young people should follow a set of rules, which will make our society a better place to live. Thus, obeying too strict rules would not help youths to be free and healthy develop.
To being with, contrary to the belief that young adults were expected to follow strict rules, evidence has shown that in this time of age, youths are tending to be more open-minded and embrace evolution and innovation. For instance, according to a recent research, young learners did not based their approaches to achieve their goals in strict rules. On the contrary, they were flexible and creative. If students were going to face obstacles throughout their process of reaching their purpose, they would find another way of approach without the need of following rigid rules.
Another reason why I think that current society is not forcing youths to obey strict rules is because young generation is taught to think differently about rules. Parents have raised their children to think in a way that is completely different than their own parents taught them. So that young adults try to follow their instincts and their dreams, which would make their world a desirable place to live. For example, when I was a child, my parents always taught me to follow my dreams and achieve them by being resilient and not give up. As I grew up, I kept that in the back of my mind as an inspiration, which really helped me to accomplish my goals. Not only I did not follow any strict rules, but I created new rules that made my process easy to achieve. If I were not raised with that spirit, I would have not been able to succeed in my life.
In conclusion, today's society should not expect youths to obey strict rules. This is because they will not be able to achieve their dreams if they are not creative or face obstacles along the way. And because young adults belong to a generation that is raised differently and will not easily comply with strict rules.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71465968586 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33271339145 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471204188482 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4526714608 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.05 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222780353976 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752329669636 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596474205363 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153154745341 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531120866483 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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