Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A controversial issue relating to whether young people help enough their community or not, has brought to the attention of public. Relevant people think that they do help considerably their community. However, in my opinion, in this time and age, children have a busy schedule, which will not let them with little time to participate in volunteering work.
First off, participating in community work requires a lot of time, today kids are busier then they were in the past. Their lifestyle has changed, the number of activities that they go throughout the day is drastically increased especially educational once. For example, after they wake up in the morning they have just enough time to eat, then they start their day going to school and hour after hour their daily activities take over until the evening. Consequently, going to all of these different kinds of educational activities, had left no time for other types of community work. That is why, children today do not have enough time to help on their community.
Furthermore, helping is essential for kids to learn the sense of responsibility and contribution, but nowadays the majority of young adults could leave their homes at an early age by attending schools that are located far from their hometown. To put it in other words, today parents tend to send their kids in the best schools, which may be located in completely different town fare from their own. Therefore, they do not see it as important to kill their free time to help another community. Young adults would be focus more on their own personal agenda, rather then helping on the community affairs. Overall, this tells us that students will tend to avoid community work especially when they are in different town, rather then their own.
In conclusion, the youngsters do not give enough time to help their community. This is because they have no time available since they have other occupations. And because the majority of students attend schools that are located far away from their hometowns.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
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Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...when they are in different town, rather then their own. In conclusion, the youngs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98820058997 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68132668576 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0414739435 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6875 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4375 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249266789683 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108372324783 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841564519875 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179200947811 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412658257374 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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