TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

In general, todays all people need job to support their life needed. Since people spend a significant part of their life time for working and earn money it's very important for all people to do a job which enjoy of doing. people wonder having a job that work only three days a week for long hours is more enjoyable or have a job that work five days a week for shorter hours? As far as I’m concerned, having experience both situation, I agree with second grope. In what follows, I will provide two reasons for my answer.
Admittedly, if people have a job that work shorter hours reserve their energy and time for spending more time with their household members. It's obvious that people work for improve their lifestyle and enjoy of their life; Moreover, everybody know that it's very important to spend time with household member to have funny time and enjoy of being together, It's be a part of human being that everybody like to have relationship with others. Therefore, it's indicate that if a person has a job that work shorter hours a day, he has energy and more time to spend with his household members and better enjoy of his job and life.
The second reason for my viewpoint is that having plan for our life make we enjoy of our life, so a job that can give us a regular plan for our life is more enjoyable. People who work five days a week have regular work to doing every day. This people have plan for their all section of life, for example, they know when they can buy a house because they have a regular schedule in their life. On the other hand, people who work three days a week have four days free it's promote them to go vacation every week and spend their money and time. They don't have any regular plan for their life so one day they find that how much they make mistake to spend their time and money for none.
all the aforementioned reasoning bring us to the conclusion that have a job that work five days a week not only give time and save people's energy to spend their time with their household members and enjoy it, but also give them a regular plan to enjoy of their life time.

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Average: 6.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...eople spend a significant part of their life time for working and earn money its very imp...
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Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...eople to do a job which enjoy of doing. people wonder having a job that work only thre...
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Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...k have regular work to doing every day. This people have plan for their all section ...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...rk to doing every day. This people have plan for their all section of life, for exam...
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Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ek and spend their money and time. They dont have any regular plan for their life so...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
... spend their time and money for none. all the aforementioned reasoning bring us t...
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Line 4, column 262, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...e them a regular plan to enjoy of their life time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36132315522 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.11399699361 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.40203562341 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1165982087 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.428571429 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0714285714 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330796092188 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170124198291 0.076458572812 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129508741174 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251066291719 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836615256938 0.0645574589148 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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