Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Other believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.write

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Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Other believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.

write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the view presented.

In general, societies require to educated people, if they want to gain success. Therefore, college students have an important role in each society, so they must be take an accurate decision. Ones wonder, what should college students do for choosing their field of study? Ones believe that college students should only attend to their talent for choosing their field of study, while others' opinion are that they should opt field of study which helps them to obtain a good job. So far as I am concerned, both of this view are somehow extreme positions which cannot lead us to the right destination. In fact, proper choosing is a dynamic process that allows for both of variable referred to in the topic.
Confessedly, each person in society needs work to gain money for surviving, and students aren't exempt from this rule. Therefore, selecting a field of study bases on availability of job is a guarantee for their future life. But, this selecting is not enough by itself, so students should consider their talent and interest of their field of study beside this. Minimum times which student have to spend for reach bachelor degree is four years which contains about 8 semesters, university courses will become more difficult per each semester. Therefore, students not only lose their passion for studying, but also they may be abandon the university if students only choose their field of study according to availability of job without considering their interest.
Talent of student will be bloomed if they choose a course which students are interested in. Therefore, they can approach to success in their study. But, only progress in study is not the aim of each student, finding a good job is the significant goal of any student as well. Although, some of talented students doesn't rely to someone to hire them because they are so ingenious to establish own companies and hire many employees, the majority of them need employers to assign them for a job, because they don't have any new precious thing to establish a new company or they don’t resourceful enough to manage a plethora of employee. Therefore, students should consider their talent and the availability of job for choosing their field of study.
All in all, each view has some weakness if it considered alone. Therefore, both of this view are be considered by students to select their field of study.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in fact, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 399.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57367248335 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498746867168 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.574734926 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.666666667 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72222222222 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.486708730378 0.243740707755 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184683437892 0.0831039109588 222% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172160875074 0.0758088955206 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316091783996 0.150359130593 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718058675258 0.0667264976115 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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