TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

Base on the reading material, it is stated that using of the ' burning mirror' which is a curving polished copper surface to concentrate sun light is only myth and the Greeks never really built such a device. The author provided three examples to support of this idea. However, the lecturer finds this idea bereft of sufficient reasoning and provides some ideas to the contrary.

Initially, the author argued that the Greeks didn't have advance technology to build that device. Because, the mirror had to be wide enough to focus sun's ray for burning ships. That being said, the speaker repudiated this idea by clarifying that the ancient Greek didn't need to have advance technology for making mirror like that. They could make separated part of mirror and then they could attach them together to make a wider mirror for focusing sun light.

Another point mentioned by the writer was that catching fire process was too long and during this the object had to have stable condition. Therefore, it is unpractical because Roman ship changed their position when they saw the mirror. However, the professor discredited this idea by depicting that there was another material which used in ship like pitch. Pitch used as sticky material for making waterproofing ships. it caught fire soon, then this fire could burn another part of ships.

The final point advanced in the reading passage was that the ancient Greeks didn't need another device like burning mirror when they could use of flaming arrow to burn enemies' ships. Yet again the lecturer casted doubt on this idea. She said that using of burring mirror surprised enemy, because they didn't see the concentrating sun light but they saw only mirror and suddenly they saw fire in their ship.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...material, it is stated that using of the burning mirror which is a curving polish...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: didn't
...ally, the author argued that the Greeks didnt have advance technology to build that d...
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Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: didn't
...ea by clarifying that the ancient Greek didnt need to have advance technology for mak...
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Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...aterial for making waterproofing ships. it caught fire soon, then this fire could ...
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Line 7, column 77, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: didn't
...ing passage was that the ancient Greeks didnt need another device like burning mirror...
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Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: didn't
...ng mirror surprised enemy, because they didnt see the concentrating sun light but the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 292.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96917808219 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24614460872 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52397260274 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6885662901 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7333333333 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46666666667 7.06452816374 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342622686637 0.272083759551 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122010107807 0.0996497079465 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832460797983 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21909258262 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614972619381 0.0443174109184 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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