Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Other believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.write

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Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Other believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.

write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the view presented.

When it’s comes to the topic of the relationship between choosing a field of study based on students talents and interests or based on availability of jobs in that field. Some argue that students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study, while some other argue that students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. I personally think both of these views are somehow extreme position which cannot lead us to the right destination. In fact, any perfect choice in the field of study for all student is a dynamic process that need to both of the variables referred in the topic.
Admittedly, any student has talent and are interested in a specific field of study. Choosing a field of study bases on students' talent and their interest is very important. Because interesting in the field of study helps students attempt more. They devote a plethora of time for studying that it helps them to approach to success in the field of study. On the other hand, if students don’t have any interest to the field of study, their spirit will be beginning to drop, they gradually become bored, so they abandon university. So it is very important that students consider their own talents and interest when choosing a field of study.
Another important option that students must consider when they choose a field of study is availability of job in that field, since all students make an attempt to learn completely a field of study to find an appropriate job in the future and utilize their knowledge to support their life, Students hope that they will find a job in the future related to their specific field of study. on the other hand, if students cannot find a proper job in their field of study they waste time because they cannot utilize their knowledge and support their life. Therefore it’s comes to mind an appropriate choice is a choice that guaranteed students can find a proper job to the field of their study.
All in all, concentrate just on one of the option that referred in the topic cannot lead us to the proper destination. Students must choose a field of study that are talented and interested in, also their field of study must guaranteed that they will find a good job in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...udy. Choosing a field of study bases on students talent and their interest is very impor...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t and their interest is very important. Because interesting in the field of study helps...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...lated to their specific field of study. on the other hand, if students cannot find...
^^
Line 3, column 549, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...their knowledge and support their life. Therefore it's comes to mind an appropriate ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, while, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71393034826 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51234052321 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 215.323595506 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.353233830846 0.4932671777 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.8935244197 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.586583862027 0.243740707755 241% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.271985955776 0.0831039109588 327% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175497995461 0.0758088955206 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.414616978305 0.150359130593 276% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126313447112 0.0667264976115 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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