TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Having enjoyable time during the work's hours has always been as a significant matter when it comes to choosing the job. That is owing to the fact that the more enjoyable is your work, the more productivity you have. There are those who contend that it is more enjoyable if people have a job with more work's hour and less work's day. I personaly am a proponent of this statement as it seems rational and fruitful. In what follows, I will attempt to clarify the reasons of my decision more.
To begin with, the first imperative reason coming to mind is having the more entertainment time. As we all know, It is clear that traveling needs to at least 2 or 3 free days. This kind of job can provide easily this situation. My father was the firsthand example of this issue and he had always this limitation problem and the free time that his institute let him go away was really limit. I remember that we always faced with this problem since he involved all of the day on work and it is easy to know these time passed with less enjoability.
Another interesting point that deserves some words here is having opportunity to set some spesific plan in order to do whatever people like do besides their works. As a matter of fact, this kind of job provide this situation. Last week I read the magazine which allude to some new researches about the fact that people is more enjoyable time and more productivity when they can allocate time to do other favorites beside doing their jobs. With this in mind, It is conspicuous that people have more time to learn music, read book, travel, go away with family and friends and even do another job beside their main job, when they have this kind of job.
To wrap it all up, taking the aforementioned idea into consideration, I believe that it is obligatory to experince other things except the job in order to have more enjoyable time and in my point of view, it is highly recommended to have job with less day involvement.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 384, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'limited'.
Suggestion: limited
...is institute let him go away was really limit. I remember that we always faced with t...
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Line 2, column 459, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ced with this problem since he involved all of the day on work and it is easy to know thes...
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Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended having'.
Suggestion: recommended having
...e and in my point of view, it is highly recommended to have job with less day involvement.
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Line 4, column 239, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
... view, it is highly recommended to have job with less day involvement.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, really, so, at least, kind of, as a matter of fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49859943978 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47165509845 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509803921569 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5935061512 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.066666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261605674118 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10039648775 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893079802177 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178624069079 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868976979184 0.0645574589148 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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