Occupation and its time can affect people’s daily plan. What days should employees work and how much time they spend on their jobs every day is defined in companies. Although some people enjoy working three days a week for long hours, others prefer to have an appointment with five days working for shorter hours. I agree that working three days a week for a long time is more pleasant. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First of all, working three days a week for extended hours leads to more family time. Spending time with family is enjoyable for everyone because family plays an essential role in people’s life. When people work three days a week, they are free on other days to spend a lot of time with their family. However, by using five days, people do not have enough time to spend with their family and feel tired after coming back home. Free whole days in a week are more desirable for everyone to spend it on the family.
Second, by working three days a week, people have enough time to do their favorite stuff. In everybody’s life, there are some things that people forget time, and they are passionate about this particular thing. For example, I love colors and their combinations, and recently I spend my time learning Photo-Shop as software to play with colors in my free days. When people have more free days, they can spend much time on their interests and feel better. While working five days can not be adequate for starting the favorites with all concentration. So, using fewer days a week can make an opportunity to be involved with enthusiasm.
In summary, a job with three days a week for long hours is favorite with all taken into account. This job provides a pleasant time with family; besides, relating to interesting things can affect a day to be enjoyable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, second, so, thus, while, for example, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.665625 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40253568847 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46875 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1897751229 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.9444444444 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337225911118 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144408164354 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110651376491 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25676274084 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550817471899 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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