TPO 30 Writing Independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
In the modern era, people seek for jobs which can perfectly suit them. Most people select their careers based on their abilities, talents, and interests. Other preferences and aspects like working hours are also considered important when one intends to choose a job. In this regard, some people prefer to have a job in which they can work only three days a week for long hours while others prefer a job in which they work five days a week for shorter hours. From my vantage point, the second one would be more rational. In the following paragraphs, the most significant reasons are illustrated.
The first aspect to point out is that long hours of work in a single day makes the person extremely exhausted. In the working days, the person works for a long time and there is much pressure on him to finish his tasks. As a result, in working days and after work not only will the person not have enough hours to manage personal tasks including house chores or dealing with children but also he would not act as sharp and active as he normally is. He even may not be able to get enough sleep since most of the day's hours are spent at work. For instance, once my father found a job as a construction supervisor. He used to work twelve hours a day but fewer days a week. The fact that he had to work fewer days a week gave us the chance to go on trips and spend time together. However, long hours of work during working days made him really tired. Over time, the pressure changed his temper and he became over sensitive and anxious. Soon, he came into conclusion that the job was really bothering for him and the consequences led him to change his job to one with normal working hours.
Furthermore, a job with more days off would make the person lose his balance in personal life. Although the person can devote more time to do exercises, playing with his children and spending more time with family, according to statistics, most people actually waste their time if they have much free time. They may spend a lot of time just surfing the Internet, watching TV or sleeping for long hours. Such activities would cause serious psychological and physical damages to the person. The other noteworthy aspect to mention is that these activities would make the person inefficient at work as well since the person would become lazy because of the long period of leisure time and they may spend hours and hours of work just waiting for their work to be finished. Consequently, they may not function well enough or may get frustrated with their jobs. However, in a normal job, such issues are not discussed since most people would not waste their free time to experience negative consequences. Therefore, they function better at work and enjoy working much more than others.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that it would be more enjoyable to have a job with shorter hours a day but more days in a week. Although one can enjoy many days off if they have a job in which they have to work three days a week, the person, in fact, gets more exhausted after work and his efficiency would definitely decline not only in real life but at work. It is recommended that organizations consider fewer working hours for their jobs as much as the job conditions allow so that they enjoy more efficient and healthy workers.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2741.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 597.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59128978224 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41523032897 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428810720268 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1058894937 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.518518519 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59259259259 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373670141973 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121860485529 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957006821905 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282887097657 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803810385532 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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