TPO 30
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is a great debate about working hour nowadays. many people wonder whether it is enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for ling hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. in my opinion, it is better to work only three days for more hours. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, one should take into account this significant fact that three-days job give one a flexible program and have many time for extra-calicular activities. as a matter-of-fact people have enough time to spend for entertaining things if they should just work three days of week. my own experience is compelling example of this. when I worked for a company for five days last year I not only have not time to go to vacation with my family but also I don't have adequate time to do my favorite activity like painting and reading novels. consequently I feel really depressed. as you can see, this experience thought me that it is really better to works for only three days a week.
In approaching in this issue, apart from the fact mentioned above, one should regard another point that working three days for week get a chance for workers to get focused on a job they do. in other word, it is better one complete his job in one try rather than dividing it into short hours. due to dividing to short period decrees efficiency by great amount to demonstrate, some researcher in Tehran universities established an experimental program to compare efficiency of work of people who works only three days to those who works 5 days. the results are surprising: over 60% efficiency of three-days works is more than five-days work. therefor I strongly believe people should work for three days a week.
In conclusion, I contend that working for three days is far better than working for five days since it makes people not only physically, but also mentally more efficient.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, so, apart from, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59885386819 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58988700847 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495702005731 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0979254384 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.3125 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.537510487881 0.236089414692 228% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197561150225 0.076458572812 258% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159078577622 0.0737576698707 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.384991266398 0.150856017488 255% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148277260407 0.0645574589148 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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