TPO 31- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern world, technological advancement are continuously evolving over the years. Gadgets and innovation are readily available for people to use, so they become less contented in the material possessions they have. In my humble opinion, I think people are less satisfied with their lives than the folks in the past. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, technology created many changes in our lives today such as invention of the internet and social media application. Majority of people uses the net to access everything they needed in their life such as to be updated in the local news and researching for school projects. Also, having social media today bridges the gap in communication for people who are distant with other. However, this advancement in communication has also detrimental effects on human being like teenagers and middle age individuals do not have physical interaction with other person. They feel that it is sufficient because in social media they have many cyber friends, but in the real world they don't spend time with their friends or co workers to get together and bond. As a result they become unattached and withdrawn to their friends and family. Also, they suffer from depression and dissatisfaction with their personal lives due to they have no friends or person to talk to when they have problem.
Secondly, people are greedy with the material possessions and wants to know more and are not contented with what they have. For example, my cousin is a car enthusiast and loves to purchase expensive cars. It is his passion to collect and trade in sports cars with friends but he doesn't know where to stop. It become his addiction to buy and buy car even if he already has the same automobile. I asked him why he always buys car even if he already has it, he just told me that he has impulsion that he can't control because he want to show people around him that he has the money to purchase it. This illustrates that people are less contented with their life because there are always better things or inventions that will be invented by our technology.
To summarize, I believe that in this era people are less contented and unhappy with their lifestyle. This is because social media application make people become isolated with their peers and family. Also, they are unsatisfied with the things they have in life because gadget or technology continuously being upgraded and they want to keep up with this change.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...ds but he doesnt know where to stop. It become his addiction to buy and buy car even i...
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...pulsion that he cant control because he want to show people around him that he has t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for example, i feel, i think, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59078971706 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7908388369 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229424918618 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086143245154 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078064979692 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167874524121 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05041223443 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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