TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to

Happiness and satisfaction are abstract philosophies. Each of us has our own ideas about them. Some people think that having amount of money, or realizing their tremendous dreams can make them jubilant. However, some people satisfy with what they have in present. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the statement that our lives now are not joyful as the life of people in the past because we have to face the rapidly changes of the world. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, if people based on the material to consider about the happiness, the world today can probably provide them whatever they want. In other words, physical conditions can help to bring people convenience. Long time ago, people did not have many machines as we have today. Obviously, it is understandable since the advanced technologies were not invented yet. Therefore, people had to work hard to have enough food to eat and they must live in the caves as well. As a result, they had to struggle to survive. However, today, we live in our houses with many kind of machines, which can support people tremendously. People do not need to worry about the weather. What they need to do is just to open the air condition and regular it to fit the heat that makes them feel comfortable. Moreover, if people love to travel, they only need to start the engine of their cars and drive wherever they would like to go. These things can possibly make people feel more enjoyable in their lives than people in the past.
Secondly, technologies can help people to find various ways to enjoy their lives. If people like to watch movies, there are a thousands of channels on the television and on the internet can provide them a profuse types of movies. If people like to play games to relax, there are also countless game shows on the internet as well. Meanwhile, in the past, there were no television and the internet .People could only talk together and because they had no means to get the information thus, the topics to talk with each other were too limited and boring. If compared life today to the life in the past apparently, one hundred percent of people claim that living in this time is more gratifying than ever before.
In conclusion, people have their own ideas about the happiness and satisfaction in life. In my view, for two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I strongly believe that people today are happier and more satisfied with their lives in both physical and spiritual life than people in the past.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 563, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
...ever, today, we live in our houses with many kind of machines, which can support people t...
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Line 2, column 932, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...ver they would like to go. These things can possibly make people feel more enjoyable in thei...
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Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: A_HUNDREDS[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. Consider using: 'a thousand'
Suggestion: a thousand
... people like to watch movies, there are a thousands of channels on the television and on th...
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Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a thousand' or simply 'thousands'?
Suggestion: a thousand; thousands
... people like to watch movies, there are a thousands of channels on the television and on th...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'type'?
Suggestion: type
...the internet can provide them a profuse types of movies. If people like to play games...
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Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...here were no television and the internet .People could only talk together and beca...
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Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: People
...re were no television and the internet .People could only talk together and because th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in my view, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67555555556 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44582183416 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491111111111 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5334935895 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264429576971 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807872315783 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595857612224 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187177388326 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286942331609 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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