Each of us have our own ideas about the role of young people in our society. Some people declare that our communities depend on young people. However, others would not agree with this statement. The Vietnamese have a proverb that young people are the future of a society. In my opinion, I totally believe that the youths play a pivotal in the development of our society. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the rate of students going to the university increases significantly year after year. If people believe that education can help to develop our society, young people probably are studying day and night to enhance their knowledge in order to make their communities more and more prosperous in the future. We all admit that today there are a number of students are learning and doing their research in the universities by their abilities. They will use their knowledge that they gain from studying in the college to apply for their job later on. Obviously, they can invent many new things in the future. Looking at the past, about two decade ago people dared not to dream of having the internet or social networks. However, with the talent of experts they make wonder things become true now.
Secondly, young people use their youth energy to contribute to increase their communities in many fields. We have to acknowledge that the rate of young people go to work is greater than the old people. In other words, there are most young people working in many companies. That means, young people help to improve the economy of our society. Actually, young people work faster and they are more productive than older people. They are also more advanced technology than old people. Meanwhile, we understand that we are living in the world of technology. The more we know about technology, the more we can apply to our jobs and produce many effective things.
In conclusion, people have their own ideas about the role of young people in society. In my view, I completely support the statement that young people are an indispensable factor for the development of a community in the future because they use their knowledge to apply for their job and make life more and more convenience day by day.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ree with this statement. The Vietnamese have a proverb that young people are the fut...
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Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'decade' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'decades'.
Suggestion: decades
... future. Looking at the past, about two decade ago people dared not to dream of having...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78205128205 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49402309859 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4671357735 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0869565217 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9565217391 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69565217391 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141990851045 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523739424904 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458435179798 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104461883942 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376515398693 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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