People nowadays have much more freedom to express themselves than they were twenty years ago. They can show their cognitions though all kinds of methods regardless of their age or income. Young people, as an integral part of human being, have their right to participate in discussing any popular topics and exert some influence on significant decision. Thus, I can not agree with the argument that young people have no impact on decisions of the whole society.
In recent ten years, young people tend to occupy dominated positions in many crucial fields. These crucial industries lead the development of the whole society and have great influence on the determination of future society. In some new industries, such as IT industry, most of the technical companies are inclined to hire young people as their employees, and even give some of them high level positions. Recruiting young people keeps their teams stay energetic and productive. Technical companies often take their staff’s effectiveness into account, when they make important decisions, because the completion of their projects depends on employees’ efficiency. In addition, those young people who stay in leadership posts can have impact on final decision of company. Thus, increasing number of young people today are joining the process of social development more actively.
Besides, young people are so innovative and ambitious that they can be competitive in many fields. These fields include business industry, hi-tech industry, etc. And all of them are essential components in social construction. In business industry, more and more young faces are starting to attend important conferences to discuss critical economic development problems. The new and advanced ideas are mostly come up with by these young businessmen, young researchers. In hi-tech industry, as I mentioned above, a technical company needs innovations to maintain its social competition. Young employees are now playing the main roles in the company because of their curiosity and creativity. They are interested in everything happening outside of the world and never stop pursuing new things to change the world. For example, Mark Zuckerberg, the CEO of Facebook, who is so creative that he has changed the way that people used to communicate, is now one of the most influential people around the world. Therefore, young people are bringing new thoughts and theories to the society, and gradually changing the world.
Admittedly, the most important positions are still occupied by old people, especially in managerial level and political field. Indeed, old people are more experienced in the way of managing employees and dealing with affairs. However, young people have more potential and opportunities than old people. They have more time to learn knowledge and experience the process of growth. They will be the decision makers and power leaders in the future society as their predecessors were in the past. That is why young people can not be separated from the development of the future world. Instead, they are the most influential group of people in the future of social development.
In conclusion, young people are the future of the society. They are slowly changing the world by using their energy and their creative thinking. Young people today have completely different ways of thinking and are living in different life styles, which modifies and influences the ideology of society. Young generation is destined to be extraordinary.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
same issues like the previous essay.
for example, look at this paragraph, the subjects are still 'young/old people' or 'they':
Indeed,
old people are more experienced in the way of managing employees and dealing with affairs. However,
young people have more potential and opportunities than old people.
They have more time to learn knowledge and experience the process of growth.
They will be the decision makers and power leaders in the future society as their predecessors were in the past. That is why
young people can not be separated from the development of the future world. Instead,
they are the most influential group of people in the future of social development.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 550 350
No. of Characters: 2866 1500
No. of Different Words: 263 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.843 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.211 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.691 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 213 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 160 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 83 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.742 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.599 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.323 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.454 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2957.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 550.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37636363636 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84319050213 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 910.8 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4575818375 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.40625 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1875 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0625 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203750196717 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625568902676 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557803500491 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135655829372 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303687514633 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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