TPO 32 writing: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Whereas some people believe that youth do not impact crucial decisions that shape society's future, I undoubtedly reckon with the idea that young individuals' decisions are the most influential in shaping our future. I will provide two compelling reasons on which I base my stance.
First of all, young people possess an innovative way of thinking because they decide to think outside the box, rather than the conventional way of thinking of the elderly. As a result, they introduce to societies a breakthrough advancement. I cannot think of a more convincing example than Steve Jobs, The Father Of the Digital Revolution. He decided to think untraditionally; he hoped to invent a smartphone with only one key. That idea looked unbelievable for the older generation. However, he continuously and diligently worked on his dream. As a result of years of his research and development with the Apple young team, he made a leapfrog and created the I phone, the world's smartest cellphone at the time. A revolutionary smartphone including a telephone, an iPod, and an internet communicator with a touch screen, all in only one device. If Steve Jobs did not decide to think differently, the world would not have enjoyed the marvel of the I phone.
Secondly, youth decisions in all aspects of life are more reachable to society than older people because they can cope with the unprecedented technological advancement. To be more specific, The current generations have tremendous social platforms such as Facebook, Twitter, Clubhouse, and many more that enable them to spread their voice, beliefs, and thoughts to make it more doable. For example, the sparkle of the Egyptian Revolution on 25 January 2011 evolved because some young people decided to change the political regime, and they did so through Facebook and Twitter to spread all the downsides of the government. Consequently, millions of young people decided to change that harmful regime, and they gathered and forced the president and the government to resign. As you can see, because young people's voices are more reachable than older people, their decision to change the whole regimen succeeded.
In conclusion, I unarguably consider that young people's decisions directly guide and influence our future. Not only did their innovative thinking lead to the development of our technological marvels, but they were also able to persuade society to follow their decisions by employing modern instruments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, whereas, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24111675127 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94305619861 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540609137056 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4137055408 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.722222222 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16442812079 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050666711575 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041179191334 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107534593332 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264358583801 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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