Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to take risks and explore new things when you are older than when you are young.
Trying new things is the essence of life; otherwise, life will be boring. Some people believe that it is better that you try new things when you get older, other than when you are young. In my opinion, I reckon that taking a risk in old age is more sensible. I feel that way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, elders are more anxious to achieve outstanding things. To be more specific, when you are young, you still have all your life ahead of you in which you can satisfy your ambitious hopes and dreams. In contrast, when you get older, you will feel that, unless you do an unpredictable accomplishment, you will end up feeling useless. For instance, after my father had retired, he embarked upon study for a Ph.D. in business; he had risked a substantial amount of money in a prestigious university. He knew that his mental abilities to memorize academic subjects were not as efficient as young people, but his potential achievement had provoked his willingness and determination. Surprisingly, his results were superb, and he outcompeted his young rivals. As you can see, the inclination to prove success triggers elders’ enthusiasm to try risky actions.
Secondly, young people have various responsibilities, which they cannot escape. In other words, youth are always busy because they start new families that they have families to provide; they have a future career to build. Therefore, they cannot take any chance to fail and lose their current established conditions, unlike older people who are free of any duty, For example, my brother, when he was in his forties, he had won the lottery to immigrate to the United States of America. Although it seemed like an immensely terrific opportunity, he did not dare to risk a well-paid and stable job. His accountability toward his family prevented him from taking that risk to start from scratch. This experience taught me that young people have several constraints to take an uncertain possibility.
In conclusion, I believe it is more rational to explore new things in old age than when you are young. Not only because elders intentionally take a risky thing to prove that they are successful, but also, the young have many responsibilities that hinder them from exploring new things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i reckon, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9689119171 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84303025227 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546632124352 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4293471157 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.947368421 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26315789474 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407143247261 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121470517219 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152558751219 0.0737576698707 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283726832309 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126365754468 0.0645574589148 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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