Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent's jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's vigorous and super competing world, choosing a career is crucial because it shapes our future. While some may argue that young people should decide not to choose their parents' jobs, others disagree. In my opinion, I do reckon that, indeed, it is far more beneficial for children to opt for the same career as their parents, for two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, it does pave children's road that guarantees a more successful career when they share their parents' same occupation. Parents are the sincerest people who can give vital guidance to their children. For example, my father-in-law is the most renowned brain surgeon in Egypt. Thus, my husband decided to follow in his father's footsteps to achieve the same success; that choice helped my husband tremendously. My father-in-law mentored him throughout his educational journey in Medical School. Throughout my husband's career path, his father gave my husband all his cumulative experiences and knowledge. He trained him to be even better than himself and contributed immensely his time and energy to make his son a highly skilled surgeon. As a result, my husband became one of the most formidable brain surgeons in Egypt. On top of that, his father made him his partner in an already well-established hospital. Had my husband chosen a different career from his father, he would never have accomplished that far-reaching success.
Another potentially significant reason is the higher likelihood of building a powerful parent-child bond when they share the same career. To be more specific, they would have enormous topics in common that they can converse about, and they come across the same challenges and obstacles. That kind of considerable mutual involvement and sharing would surely lead to easily bridge the generation gap, which eventually would develop a connectivity relationship. Again, back to my husband and his father as an ample illustration. My husband always relies on and trusts only his father. When they talk, they look like best friends. He is his best friend. However, in my relationship with my mother, we are busy the whole week in our jobs, and we do not have time to connect in this fast-paced modernized world. Therefore, we feel that we are losing our closeness. As you can see, only children who have their parents' jobs can strengthen their relationship.
In a nutshell, I highly urge that children choose t the same career as their parents. Not only does it ensure a successful path for their jobs, but it also helps them to enhance their relationship with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08490566038 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82765609957 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549528301887 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8691642369 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.24 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.96 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172040005207 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504399245823 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675431116187 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128340898433 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480452376668 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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