Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent's jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's vigorous and super competing world, choosing a career is crucial because it shapes our future. While some may argue that young people should decide not to choose their parents' jobs, others disagree. In my opinion, I do reckon that, indeed, it is far more beneficial for children to opt for the same career as their parents, for two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, it paves children's road to a more successful career when they share their parents' same occupation because parents are the sincerest people who can provide vital guidance to their children. For example, my father-in-law is the most renowned brain surgeon in Egypt. Thus, my husband decided to follow in his father's footsteps to achieve the same success; that choice helped my husband tremendously. My father-in-law mentored him throughout his educational journey in Medical School. Throughout my husband's career path, his father gave my husband all his cumulative experiences and knowledge. He trained him to be even better than himself and contributed immensely his time and energy to make his son a highly skilled surgeon. As a result, my husband became one of the most formidable brain surgeons in Egypt. On top of that, his father made him his partner in an already well-established hospital. Had my husband chosen a different career from his father, he would never have accomplished that far-reaching success.
Another potentially significant reason is the higher likelihood of building a powerful parent-child bond when they share the same career. To be more specific, they would have enormous topics in common that they can converse about, and they come across the same challenges and obstacles. That kind of considerable mutual involvement and sharing would surely lead to easily bridge the generation gap, which eventually would develop a connectivity relationship. Again, back to my husband and his father as an ample illustration. My husband always turns on and never trusts anybody but his father. When they talk, they look like best friends. Not to mention that they see and connect more often than any parent-child would do. His father can understand him without even saying and help him without requesting because they have spent a long time talking and working together, they have the same interests and concerns, and they share their happiness and sadness. As you can see, my husband is like many children who strengthen their relationship by sharing the same jobs.
In a nutshell, I highly encourage that children choose t the same career as their parents. Not only does it ensure a successful path for their jobs, but it also helps them to enhance their relationship with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13439635535 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77109846843 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544419134396 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7135389687 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47826086957 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134499777547 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469759363209 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531176131715 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118128701253 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570002646977 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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