Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to take risks and explore new things when you are older than when you are young.
We are all aware the trying new things is the essence of life; otherwise, life will be boring. Some people believe that it is better that you try new things when you get older, other than when you are young. In my opinion, I reckon that taking a risk in old age is more sensible. I feel that way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, elders are more anxious and determined to achieve successful and outstanding things. To be more specific, when you are young, you still have all your life ahead of you in which you can satisfy your ambitious hopes and dreams. In contrast, when you get older, you will feel that, unless you do an unpredictable and risky accomplishment, you will end up feeling useless. For instance, after my father had retired, he embarked upon study for a Ph.D. in business; he had risked a substantial amount of money in a prestigious university. He knew that his mental abilities to study hard and memorize academic subjects were not as efficient as young people, but his potential achievement had provoked his willingness and determination. Surprisingly, his results were superb, and he outcompeted his young rivals. A few months after graduation, He got a job offer as a professor at that university. As you can see, the inclination to prove success in that old age does trigger their enthusiasm to try risky actions.
Secondly, young people have various responsibilities, which they cannot escape. In other words, youth are always busy because they start new families that they have families to provide; they have a future career to build. Therefore, they cannot take any chance to fail and lose their current established conditions, unlike older people who are free of any duty, and they have nothing to lose. For example, my brother, when he was in his forties, he had won the lottery to immigrate to the United States of America. Although it seemed for most people and himself as an immensely terrific opportunity, he had hesitated because he did not dare to risk a well-paid and stable job. His accountability toward his family prevented him from taking that risk and travel abroad to start from scratch. This experience taught me that young people do have several constraints to take an uncertain possibility.
In conclusion, I believe it is more rational to explore new things in old age than when you are young. Not only because elders intentionally take a risky thing to prove that they are successful, but also, the young have many responsibilities that hinder them from exploring new things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i reckon, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86818181818 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80511634089 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4907965286 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9523809524 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38095238095 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377113625585 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110531372974 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148316113859 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274161539292 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123231148781 0.0645574589148 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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