TPO 28: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education is critically important because it is the gate to a prosperous future professionally and personally. Whereas some people believe that parents in the past were more involved in their children's learning than their contemporary counterparts, others hold the opposite standpoint. In my opinion, I do reckon that the current parental involvement in children's education is more extensive than ever before. I feel that way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, nowadays, the vast majority of parents are more aware than in the past that education can give their children a competitive edge that enables their children to stand out of the crowdedness in the fiercely competitive modern world. I have a vivid example of this situation. A long time ago, I had my high school diploma, and my parents thought that was enough education for me. However, my attitude towards my daughter when she finished her high school diploma was entirely different; I highly encouraged her to study at medical school in the USC in the US. As a result, she is now one of the most renowned doctors in Egypt. Had not for my awareness of the power of education and my considerable involvement, my daughter would have never achieved that level of recognition.
Secondly, parents now support their children financially more than before. In other words, parents now work hard, save money, and even get loans to finance their children's schooling in the most prestigious schools. Therefore, in their mindset, they have every right to be extensively involved in their education choices. For instance, my best friend's parents spent a substantial amount of money on my friend's schooling. As a result, they helped him choose appropriate courses and programs tailored to meet the needs of well-rounded development. In contrast, two decades ago, parents could hardly bear the basic requirements for their children. They cannot afford that kind of expenditure on education, so they were less willing to be involved in their children's education. One case in point is my father received his college education by taking out a bank loan-My grandparent did not pay his tuition fees. Accordingly, my grandparents never asked my father about his academic achievement, school activities, or chosen major. As you can see, parents' ability to finance their children contributes to their involvement in their education.
In a nutshell, I believe that currently, parents are tremendously more involved in their children's education than the previous generation. Not only because of the increasing awareness of the educational value but also because they can afford to finance their children's education more than ever before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, for instance, i feel, in contrast, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29061784897 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94630401349 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3921432885 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.090909091 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8636363636 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300210489942 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104325145402 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956996964009 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221836567019 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658226068162 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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