Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Majority of humans spend their childhood beside their parents. Parents are the first teachers who teach children how to talk or walk, good manners, and so on. Consequently, throughout history, parents have played a prevailing role in children’s life. In this regard, there is a long-standing, heated debate among people about whether nowadays, parents are engaged with children’s education or not. Some people are leading proponents of the claim that due to being educated people, modern parents do care about children's education. Nonetheless, from my own perspective, this statement is false. As a matter of fact, i wholeheartedly disagree with such people and firmly believe that modern parents are not involved with their children's education as they were in the past. In the subsequent paragraphs, i will delve into two conspicuous reasons in order to aptly elaborate on mt standpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that advancement of social media has created a constant stream of distractions, making it difficult for parents to focus on their children. In other words, some parents mostly spend their time surf the internet. To take a personal experience as an instance, when i was thirteen, one my school friends, Tom, did not get good grades at elementary school. His father had died when he was a bay and his mother was a homemaker. However, his mother did not attend school meeting or pay attention to his children grade to find out why he received such low grades because she was a blogger and always busy producing content for her website. Had she not utilized social media, she would have paid more heed to her son.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that modern parents often have busy and demanding careers, which can leave them with less time and energy to connect with their children. The noteworthy statistics, revealed by recent social ground-breaking research conducted in our country indicate that approximately eighty-five percent of grown-ups spend majority of time not only working in work place but also improving their skills related their field and this time comes to a total of fourteen hours a day. In other words, rarely do adults have enough time. As a result, cannot focus on their children, for they are tied up with their jobs during the day. Hence, they cannot be involved with their education.
To wrap to up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, on soon realizes that parents today often spend their time either with social media or with activities related to the job. Accordingly, they do not have adequate time to focus on the children's life. Owing to foster well-informed and polite individuals for society, i strongly recommend those parents get more involved with whole parts of children's life. if they take action in this way, we will have a developed society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, nonetheless, so, well, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2383.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09188034188 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79491753537 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568376068376 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0196422263 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.608695652 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.347826087 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284453733733 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844462721586 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693939234926 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178118693784 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847522854391 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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