Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are more focus on education and many people are very concerned with it. Personally, I believe parents are indeed more involved in children's education, compared to the past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following assay.
To begin with, along with the development of society, more and more adults, some of which become parents, have recieved higher education. Naturally, they may lay more emphasis on the education of the younger generation. Additionally, they have the fundamental ability to judge the school's quality through their children's experience.My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I came home after school, my parents are always willing to talk to me about everyday's school-life. Sometimes I tell some funny stories happened among teachers and students, and other time I may express ideas about my academic life. They will focus their attention and hope to know If I enjoy my day and whether I sucessfully acquire more knowledge through classes.
What's more, taking the ever-rising pressure of competition between students of the similar age, parents are more eager to provide the better condition and help their children stand out. As a result, not only they examine the school that their chhildren will attend carefully, but also make efforts to enrich studednts' life after school. To be more specific, parents are actively participant in organizing children's study, especially when they are teenagers. For instance, my little brother is in primiary school and he leave school early in the afternoon. Instead of doing homework or relaxing himeself, he has to take many other extracurricular courses, such as drawing lesson and music lesson. Moreover, he have to take part in Maths and English lessons at weekends. He feels a bit exhausted but enriched.
In conclusion, based on the arguments explored before I am of the opinion that parents are more concerned with their childern's education. This is because they realize the significance of education, and parents hope their children to be more competitve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24107142857 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83276898891 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604166666667 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0717734455 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8333333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216461240778 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717134689602 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648838668295 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157044843814 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463605044477 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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